Project 3 Draft

In this post I will include a link to my Project 3 Draft. This is a very ROUGH draft of my final project.

o5com. "Men Arguing" 8/25/2010 via Flickr. CC BY 2.0 License. 

What I want my peer editors to look for.

• Because I am writing my argument as a blog post, I know I have to keep my paragraphs brief, and concise. However, I feel like I am not providing enough information. Any suggestion would be appreciated. 
• I am also worried that the small paragraphs I'm writing are making the essay too choppy. 

Here is a link to my Project 3 Draft: My Public Argument.